Date: November 26 2014
Time: 7:00 PM to 8:35 PM
Location: Public Library
C S Burgar
Open 7:10 PM, by Rusty
Brief general discussion of format for those not present last meeting.
Confirm continuation, with review at future meeting.
Discuss, leading discussions, Cori, Brian and Eathel agree to decline unless they find something of intense interest to them.
G W will lead on a rotating basis if he determines the group is fine with his direction of discussion. All agreed we will inform him if we are not interested in his discussion line. So for now Rusty will lead discussions with input provided by the group.
“What was the best opening line of a story you have read?”
Group consensus is that the opening paragraph needs to grab them to continue reading. The opening sentence needs to grab them but they give the paragraph a second chance to draw them in. If that fails it is not likely they will continue unless desire is already in them to read the piece.
We find genres nearly dictate the type of opening used.
The group tends towards Fantasy and fiction in general though other genres are read and were discussed.
We find we are drawn in more by openings that start in the middle of the story and are action based. Descriptive opening are also a common drawing. Less so are narrative and reporting.
GW offered the group a hand out to go with the discussion. Submission requirements for the publication, “The First Line’s”
Next Discussion will be: “Do you think it is ever to late to write”
Author: Eathel Carmichael
Piece: “Princess of the Animals”
Review: Level 5
A long discussion ensued, including technical issues. The reading was found to need a different view-point, perhaps from the main character’s first person emotional feelings or a secondary characters views on the action and the protagonist. The action was found disjointed and from a bird’s eye view with unnecessary actions included in the writing. It is felt certain aspects needed fleshing out, while others could be left out or minimized. Perhaps using a different format would making understanding the piece easier and might draw in readers better. The piece was found chaotic, an impersonal bird’s eye of the scene and difficult to retain attention or focus on what the intent of the piece was. Being listed as Chapter One but being written as a prolog, this added to the difficulties. We felt we needed some sort of character connection to continue reading any further and that it was lacking this asset.
Author: Brian Hill
Piece: “September 8″
Review: Level 1 or open
A short discussion ensued. All agreed it was an easy read. Well done, feeling realistic. A good job describing the life of the farm. Good use of character writing. Brian was encouraged to continue with the journal style of writing his fiction.
end of reviews: 8:25 PM
Rusty informed the group the Skype set up is ready for the meetings, we can include Eric when he is ready to start as well as any previous members who wish to be involved long distance once again.
Next Meeting is December 17 2014
in the same room
It will be our annual Christmas party with:
- Chinese gift exchange, please bring one wrapped book.
- We each will bring snacks and drinks as well.
December peer review will be of:
C S Burgar
This weeks recommended reading is: J. R. R. Tolkien, The Hobbit
Meeting Adjourned at 8:35 PM